Talk:Mozaffar-Hosayn Mirza

Mozaffar-Hosayn Mirza is currently a Royalty, nobility and heraldry good article nominee. Nominated by Amir Ghandi (talk) at 05:08, 19 November 2024 (UTC) An editor has indicated a willingness to review the article in accordance with the good article criteria and will decide whether or not to list it as a good article. Comments are welcome from any editor who has not nominated or contributed significantly to this article. This review will be closed by the first reviewer. To add comments to this review, click discuss review and edit the page.

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Nominator: Amir Ghandi (talk · contribs) 05:08, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Borsoka (talk · contribs) 02:41, 14 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

2. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

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7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Image review

• File:9 Hashim. Mirza Rustam Safavi. (1569-1641) LACMA 1635-40.jpg: US PD tag is needed; could the source be more specific?
  • Done

Source review

• Academic sources of high standard are cited. The article is primarily verified by secondary sources, although primary and tertiary sources are also cited.
• According to the contemporary historian Iskandar Beg Munshi, Ismail had sent the orders for the murder of Mozaffar and his remaining brothers, however before the order could be executed, he died in 1577. Could you add a second citation to a secondary or tertiary source? Borsoka (talk) 02:50, 14 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I couldn't find anything. Amir Ghandi (talk) 08:50, 14 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

• I would clarify that his father was the Safavid governor of Kandahar.
  • Doesn't the following sentence clarify it?
• Introduce Kandahar as a province. The text of subsequent sentences shows that Kandahar is a province in the context, but it is linked to the article about the town.
  • Well, the borders of the modern Kandahar province are different than the ancient one, that's why its linked to the city. I added a 'province' after the first mention.
• He was a member of... Who?
  • Clarified
• ...however before the order could be executed, he died in 1577 Rephrase and avoid "however".
  • Done
• Per the request of... Rephrase.
• ...the oligarchs... Rephrase.
• Hamza Beg made contact with the Mughal emperor, Akbar, who had been approached by the Uzbeks of Bukhara to conquer Kandahar, reassuring him that the commercial traffic was stable despite the rapid political changes. Rephrase or split (1. The Uzbeks approach Akbar to (?). 2. Hamza sent envoys to Akbar to (?), and reassured him...)
• Attribute the quote ("good faith") to somebody, or delete the quotation marks.
• ...who had a difficult relationship with Mozaffar... Why?
• ...to the Mughal court Where?
• ...Akbar recalled him... Had he previously visited the Mughal court? If yes, make it clear.
  • Recalled as in 'officially order (someone) to return to a place'.
    • Oh, my bad. Changed the word to 'summoned'.
• ...like his brother... Delete.
  • Done
• ...leaving Rustam Mirza as the absolute head of his family in India Had they previously been reconciled? If yes, make it clear. Is the adjective necessary?
• Introduce Patna as an Indian city.
• One of his daughters... Whose?
  • Clarified
• (Lead): ...he was able to kill Hamza Beg and capture Rustam's lands... Rephrase: "...killed...and captured..."
  • Done
• (Lead): He died in 1600 in India, five years after his exodus from Iran. I would delete it. Instead I would mention that his son and grandson became high-ranking aristocrats in the Mughal Empire. Borsoka (talk) 02:43, 15 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • Done