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I've listed this article for peer review because it's the first biography I've worked on. It was quick-failed for GA (Changes per recommendations made) and has been greatly improved from it's start-class beginnings a few weeks ago. A thorough peer review would be much appreciated, as I'd like to take another stab at GA soon. I've never written a biography article before, so any and all help would be appreciated.

Thank you! Jhfortier (talk · contribs ) 22:16, 24 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

• Okay, as a disclaimer this is my first peer review, so don't kill me for not being completely thorough.

  Not at all! I've made some forays into Peer Reviews and can say for sure that more thorough is always better.

• I notice the article has no images. So maybe if you can, try to find an image, fair use or not.

  I've made some requests on Flickr, but fair-use stuff has been difficult to find. It's definitely on my to-do list.

• The article appears to be missing the persondata.

  Added

• The Bellwether is awarded in even-numbered years, and includes guaranteed major publication and a cash prize of $25,000, fully funded by Kingsolver.

  Be sure to include the type of dollars these are. It could refer to US, Canadian, etc. currency.

  Done.

• She has also been published as a science journalist in periodicals.

  "Which periodical(s)?" one may ask.

  Added a citation to the author's official bibliography -- although this isn't the most desirable reference, finding the actual publications would be difficult, as they're all from the early/mid 1980s and in minor journals. I have a reference to a NY Times article saying she was published there, and a link to the bibliography, hopefully that's good enough for a GAR...

• Since this article is about an American woman, generally preferable to use American English according to the manual of style.

  Ack, you've caught me! I"m Canadian! Could you possibly point out the non-US English usage?

  Honours and neighbours —Mikemoral♪♫ 05:24, 25 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  Fixed.

• The section "The Bellwether Prize" should probably be renamed "Bellwether Prize" per the MOS.

  Done

• Make sure multiple footnotes are listed in order.

  Done

• Make sure the citation style is consistent.

  Done as best I can do.

• Watch for abbreviations, that they are either explained or eliminated. Especially i.e., etc., no., Inc., Corp.

  Could you point them out?

  Sorry, just a generic point.

• Make sure all title headings are correctly capitalized.

  Done

• Kingsolver is also an accomplished poet and essayist. She has published two essay collections, High Tide in Tucson and Small Wonder: Essays and a selection of her poetry is published in an anthology entitled Another America. Her prose poetry also accompanied photographs by Annie Griffiths Belt in a work titled Last Stand: America's Virgin Lands.

  Perhaps a brief overview of these works can be added, but short and concise.

—Mikemoral♪♫ 04:14, 25 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

• I'll give this a go in the next few days. One of the most difficult things is finding reliable third-party references for these so that they don't come off as OR (this has been the main thing preventing me from writing a good 'literary themes' section). Perhaps if I delve back into the NYT archives they'll have something...

I've responded to the points as I complete them (some of the citation stuff will take longer). I so appreciate this review, thank you!Jhfortier (talk · contribs ) 04:59, 25 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've added one more point and addressed your questions. —Mikemoral♪♫ 05:34, 25 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks, the fresh perspective is always so helpful! Jhfortier (talk · contribs ) 05:57, 25 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

No problem. —Mikemoral♪♫ 06:13, 25 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Belovedfreak

Personal life

• Carlisle, Kentucky and Belgian Congo could do with wikilinks. if you want to be careful about overlinking (which is a good idea!) you could delink Democratic Republic of the Congo since Belgian Congo is more relevant to her life, and the DRC is immediately linked from that article. Although... if she went there when she was 7, wouldn't it have been the Republic of the Congo (Léopoldville)?
• "At the age of seven, her father..." - makes it sound like it was when her father was seven
• The lead says that she spent a year in Africa, but the time span is not mentioned in this section

Writing career

• Could we have publication dates for all of her books?
• "Her most famous work of fiction is arguably..." - "arguably" is a bit vague and weasely; who argues this?
• Can you add any more detail about the background of the writing of her books? One thing that struck me straight away is that The Poisonwood Bible is set in central Africa. Was this inspired by her early life?
• "Kingsolver is also an accomplished poet and essayist." - who says that she is accomplished?
• "She has also been published as a science journalist in periodicals" - I see that this has been mentioned above, but could you actually name the periodicals and the subjects she's written on?

Reception

• "U.S. President" doesn't need to be linked here, it doesn't add anything to this atrticle, and will be linked to from Bill Clinton anyway.
• "Her 1998 bestseller, The Poisonwood Bible, won..." - is there a citation for this sentence?
• James Beard Award, Los Angeles Times Book Prize, Bellwether Prize and The New York Times Best Seller list can all be linked (note "The", and put The New York Times in italics).
• You say she has won these awards "among others" - why leave use hanging? What others?

References

• There's some work you can do here to make these more consistent and comprehensive. I've added a bit of info to some as an example, but for each one check if you have author, date, title, publisher, accessdate etc, where possible. Books should have ISBNs. Only sources that are titles of books, newspapers, magazines etc should be in italics. Websites should not (eg. Oprah.com). Having said all that, I'm not sure that it's necessary to have all the "format" fields filled in. I've not seen those used so extensively before. Eg. (book review) and (website).
• Consider converting dates and accessdates to Month date, year format. This is not a GA requirement, but reduces confusion as yyyy--mm--dd can be ambiguous. People don't always know which is the month and the day. Spelling out the month helps that.
• The citation currently at #28 - that goes to the Bellweather Prize information - is a good exmaple of where more detail is needed!

Images

• With regard to images, fair use wouldn't be appropriate here. She is a living person, so theoretically a free image is obtainable. Have you thought about trying to obtain an image from Kingsolver herself, or her "people"? See Wikipedia:Requesting copyright permission, User:R. Baley/Acquire a free image and User:Malik Shabazz/Requesting free content if you're interested in trying that.

More sources?

• If you don't have access to books on Kingsolver, have you tried google books? I did a quick search and came across this, this and this for example.

Hope this helps! Good work on getting it to this stage.--BelovedFreak 20:59, 25 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, this was very helpful. I just have a question (perhaps more to be added later?):

• With respect to the publication dates -- I've given the years in the 'works' section, but do you think they should be put in the Writing Career section as well?Jhfortier (talk · contribs ) 01:35, 26 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  I think that would be helpful to the reader. it's something that I, as a reader, felt was "missing" as I went through. It's part of her biography, part of what she's got up to in her life, and helps to add context. I like to think of the list of works as a kind of appendix to the article. I'll try to keep an eye on this page, but if you have any questions, and I don't seem to be responding, please give me a nudge on my talkpage. Also, let me know if you can't view those google book page for some reason, as I know they sometimes have a limit.--BelovedFreak 13:26, 26 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I can definitely see your point; I'll work on integrating the years in the next day or so. I think the difficult part, from my perspective, is finding a way to state the years without getting too repetitive. I'm sure I'll figure it out.

And those google book links were great! I had honestly never used google books before (I'm mostly in Scholar, myself) and they were quite helpful. I've integrated two of them into the article, where they nicely replace some of the links to the official bio (which aren't as reliable/neutral). Many thanks for your input! Jhfortier (talk · contribs ) 15:37, 26 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, that's been done. You're right; it really does enhance the content of the article! Jhfortier (talk · contribs ) 15:53, 26 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]